just like the movie
you captured the flow, dialogue, credibility, and genius comedic timing of the movie
Its a shame that's really, really not a compliment
You need to work on your comedic timing, and flow of script. You had some good ideas in there, but the whole thing just kind of stumbled along akwardly, destroying the good material you had. Also, background music helps more than you may expect
A nice try, but too clumsy to be very enjoyable